Locked in the fruit shop!

WALT-Write a narrative using the T.O.P.S structure.

In the lovely Cook Islands there were a shine bright sun in the blue sky and there was two twin sisters named Molly and Lilly,Molly and lilly had Teal eyes that look like a sparkly diamond,they had brown skin and molly has light pink hair like like the afternoon sky and a blue rose  lilly has blue hair that look like the light blue ocean and the sky too and has a pink rose in her hair . Their family was  poor so they had no money at all.  Lily whispered “Why does everyone in this Island have cool clothes and nice shoes and not us, it’s not fair” Molly answered  “Because they have jobs that’s why and not everyone has cool clothes like the poor’’.  The sisters decided to get a job because they were sick of having no money. They decided to walk into town and look for work.  When they got there,all they could see was delicious food.

They search around and around the town and finally they saw a  sign that say “Help Wanted” So they zoomed  in before the man get in the shop and have the job .Finally they bet the man they  looked around and Molly whispered “This is beautiful and warm too’. They found the office so Molly and Lily knocked on the door and there was a nice man sitting on his chair and cheerfully spoked “Welcome are you coming to eat or what “ Molly answered “No Mr we are here because we want a job here is that alright “. The man smiled and said “Ok you got the job” Molly and Lily was so glad that they got the job. They jumped up and down then the man said “Sit, sit my name is Tom what is your name.” Molly cheerfully answered”My name is Molly and her name is Lilly and we are twin sisters” “Yay twin sisters!”.


Then Tom showed where they are going to work and then he said “So which job do you want “Then Molly asked”What kind of job do you have”Tom said “We have fruit shop or fruit smoothies shop”.Molly and Lilly had a conversation together and they said “The fruit smoothie shop please’’.Tom showed what they have to do they had to make fruit smoothies.


They went to work early in the morning at 1am when they ran to work they open the shop and one customer came and said “ Hi can I have a yummy smoothie please”Lilly said “ Ok what would you like in your smoothie”.The man said nicely “I would like four mango, one  banana and two apples please” Molly hurry and did the smoothie Lilly who was the counter girl said “ That will be one dollar fifty please”The man handed the money he handed 5 dollar and lilly was going to give the change but then he said “you can have the changed Lilly said”Thank you very much.”The man said “That all right” Then he got his smoothie and he fell in love  with the smoothie. His eyes made a heart  and he said “I am coming back tomorrow and everyday .6 days later they were rich and now they can buy clothes and shoes too.

They runned out of fruit and so they went to the fruit place which they like to call it fruit cave because it look like a cave and it have fruit in it too.As they went to get some fruit,the door slamed and then the door lock.  Lilly said “We are lock we are lock”Molly said No we are not...BUT I think we are lock”Noooooo” said Lilly.”Calm down Lilly”Said Molly.They wait and wait then it was morning time and they smell like rotten egg and smell like old rushing socks.


They remember that they put the key on the hook and then they remember that they boss told then that he put a key in one of the fruit bucket and the they search everywhere and then Lilly said “Why don’t we look in all of the bucket and then we might find it.”Then like 5 minutes later they finally found the key and they  opened the door and then the boss came and said “Where were you?” Molly said “We were locked in the fruit cave for like 2 days and now we are out”.They boss said “That is why you have to always look after the key”Lilly said “Ok boss” Then the finally had a good life and job and they said that they will never forget about the key mystery and never give up on the job. Now they are rich and also their  family are rich too and they even have cool clothes and they learnt not to be greedy and to love what they already have like their family that is what mattered to them the most.

Snoopy - My Brave dog.

One cold night, a dog named Snoopy, got into trouble.  He lived  happily with his lovely family. The people in his family are Charday, Wiremu, Kauri, Charlotte and Daniel.  Charday had decided to go on the computer, when a strong wind came and blew the fence down.  Snoopy heard a dog barking outside, so he  ran out of the house and onto the road.  When Charday looked for Snoopy, he was not there. Charday thought, “He must be outside.”  She just kept on playing computer games.

Snoopy ran and ran, thinking it was great fun playing on the road. Suddenly, a car appeared, racing down the road. It ran Snoopy over and did not stop. The people in the car just drove away and did not care about Snoopy.   Snoopy tried to go home but he could not get there quickly because he had a badly injured left back leg.

When he got home, he sneaked into the house and laid down on the ground, waiting for his family to see him . When Wiremu went into the kitchen, he turned on the light and saw a pool of blood on the ground and realised Snoopy had been hurt.  He screamed, ” Mum help!  Look at Snoopy.  He has blood all over him and I think his leg is badly hurt!”.   

Charlotte went to look at Snoopy and said, “What should we do?” 


Then Charday went and looked at Snoopy. She grabbed the home phone and called her big brother yelling, “Daniel you have to come home because Snoopy has blood all over him!”


Daniel rushed home and helped Charlotte clean the blood off Snoopy.  Charday was upset and started to cry when she looked at his left back foot and yelled out, “Snoopy has the biggest cut I've ever seen. It's terrible!"  


Then everyone came and looked at it. They called the vet, who said that they had to take him there immediately but they could not lift him up and carry him to the car.

They waited until William came home. When he arrived, he said that they all needed to say goodbye to Snoopy. Charday started to cry and cry. She said, “He has been the best friend in the world to me and I don’t want him to leave." 


William lifted him up and took him to the car and drove to the vet. Two hours later, out came Snoopy! Charday was so happy to see him and she hugged him and kissed him.
Everyone was so glad to have Snoopy back!! He recovered very well and he never chased cars ever again!!